annotated bibliography

Alena DePugh

Professor S. Morrow

Writing & Rhetoric

7 November 2011

Annotated Bibliography Exercise

            Messer, Neil. “Letter to the Editor: The repeal of ‘don’t ask, don’t tell’ is just the first step” The Michigan Daily. The Michigan Daily, 21 Sept. 2011. Web. 3 Nov. 2011.

            In this article, Messer says he is surprised that there aren’t any articles in The Michigan Daily that mention D.A.D.T. Even though this source is very biased, coming from a gay soldier, it is a very good article. Messer believes that “the repeal of D.A.D.T is a great step forward for our country” and that the next step will hopefully be “changing the Defense of Marriage Act.” This source will help me argue that gay soldiers and non-gay soldiers do think differently. Messer is happy that he can be honest about who he is now, but he doesn’t realize how uncomfortable it will be for straights to shower with him.

            ““Don’t ask, don’t tell” consigned to history .” CBS news. Web. 11 Sept. 2011.

            After 18 long years, gays can finally be open about their ways of life and serve in the military. Not everyone today is accepting or happy of the D.A.D.T repeal “Some in Congress still oppose the change,” (CBS news 2011). Now soldiers that were discharged during the D.A.D.T law can reenlist. This story is very credible, it’s simply stating the facts. I believe that no matter who you are, you should be able to fight for our freedom. Personally, even though I’m glad the United States is trying to make everything equal for everyone, I still think this law should be in effect. CBS news helps me argue that, since I’m on some of the Congress members’ sides, D.A.D.T shouldn’t have been repealed.

article citation

"U.S. military ends 'don't ask, don't tell'." Globe & Mail [Toronto, Canada] 21 Sept. 2011: A3. Gale Biography In Context. Web. 27 Oct. 2011.

^^^^^^this is how it was cited at the bottom of the article^^^^^^

Robert Burns was the author of this article. I have already summarized this article in my previous blog. I will use this aritcle for my essay showing that this "law" has been officially lifted to allow gays and lesbians to be themselves and still fight for our country.

"dont ask, dont tell" article summary

the us military ended "dont ask, dont tell" so gay and lesbian military members dont have to "lie about who they are." president obama and leon panterra keep talking about all the good things that will happen to our country now that this "law" is lifted.

im for the "dont ask, dont tell" issue becuase i know how uncomfortable it can be to be around gays or lesbians. especially since soldiers have to shower with their own gender.

working hypothesis

with the topic i chose, "dont ask, dont tell", i hypothesize that ethos is used in the articles i have found online; pathos is used to make you either for or against gays in the military; and logos is used by conitnually adding the military's opinions. with these statements, im forming my arguement that i am for the "dont ask, dont tell" issue in our society today.

screening questions for topics

The Myth of College as a Fairytale
1.yes. ive always been told college is "so fun" when really its alot of hard work
2.yes. same as number one.
3.it might be hard to find material on this subject, but i would look for many articles.
4. yes. i know college isnt all fun & games.

Where "Don't Ask, Don't Tell" Remains
1.yes. i am both for and against gays, lesbians, bisexual, and transgenders, so i could write alot about this topic.
2. i wouldn't have a firm opinion, since im on both sides.
3.there would be alot of material that talks about this subject.
4.yes. if you want to fight for our country, it shouldnt matter who you are.

I would lean more towards the first topic i chose. I have a firm opinion on it and would enjoy writing about it. BUT-im going to go with the second topic, because i can find more info! (:

research freewrite

      I'm still not for sure of what I want to research and write about. There are so many different topics to choose from. I plan to examaine and explain my topic and hypothesis thoroughly so others will understand it very clearly.
     When I choose a topic, I plan to use many different sources. I will try to fnd websites, commercials, books, and older documents to help me with my paper.
      Right now, the hardest problem for me is finding a topic I WANT to write about. Also, finding reliable information to back up my statements.

another ad

content: this ad is selling hair spray. it is an object.

message: this ad is saying that this hair spray is the best.

character & setting: a girl with huge hair  is the character. shes a white female, about 30 years old. this ad is showing how your hair can hold its style for a long time with this hair spray.

theme: "your hair will look like this if you use our hair spray"

medium: this is a print ad.

history: i believe this ad is from america, in the 80s. it seems like this ad is mainly for girls, since it shows a girl in this ad.

word & image: the words describe what the hair spray does. the words have priority. it persuades others to use this product.

layout: on  a page. the girl with big hair is smack dab in the middle with words around her & hair spray in the bottom right corner. the first thing you see is her hair, so you know its about a hair product.

design: ........?

voice: the voice is persuassive.

rhetorical appeals: it makes you want to have good hair like this, so you want to use the hair spray.

strategy development: the word and the pictures show you how amazing this product is.

cultural resonance: no.

"Thw World's Local Bank"

From Cassinelli, I learned alot more about globalization than I wanted to. Personally, I never knew it was a problem. After reading this, I actually want to know more about what's going on today. Cassinelli has a very strong introduction. He says "Globalization is undoubtedly one of the defining phenomena of our time." By saying this, he's not beating around the bush about what he is getting ready to infrom the audience about. He flat out says globalization is a major problem. The structure of this article is very well also. When Cassinelli transitions to his next paragraphs, he is very smooth and understandable. The content in this article is, once again, very good. He describes what he's talking about and tried to see other peoples opinion and how they might see an image, ad or commercial. Overall, this article was very clear and easy to understand.

"more than just dolls"

My reaction to "more than dolls" webpage is probably like everyone elses. No one is perfect and no one is going to look like barbie or GI JOE. Little innocent girls shouldn't be thinking that thats the only way they're going to be beautiful and thats how every single girl must look. Also, young boy toddlers shouldn't be raised thinking that they must have muscles to be attractive. Then again, being overweight is unhealthy, therefore I believe thats why they only make "skinny" dolls and action figures.

Ads everywhere today are about diet pills and loosing weight. I'm not against being healthy and working out, but I am against anorexic highschool and middleschoolers. If you're overweight and WANT to be on a diet, go for it. But if you only weigh 105 lbs, don't start taking diet pills to be a double digit rather than a triple digit.

In seventeen magazines, they always have a "fitness" section. http://www.seventeen.com/video/?c=HealthandFitness This website shows how to work out, not how to loose alot of weight. Today, body image is still an issue and will always be for insecure people. As i said above about diet ads everywhere, I believe thats the main reason for self-esteem issues.

comparing colleges

OUC is a very friendly, welcoming environment. Here you can relax outside on our beautiful small campus and expand your knowledge in our rooms. You can also express yourself in our theatre and art rooms.

MSC is a homey, fun-filled place to be. We have seasonal parties, many sports, and a pool for our dorms. Here, you will never forget your well earned education.

The pictures on both of these college websites seem to be about being yourself and having fun in college while gaining your degree. At OUC, it shows pictures of the campus, people learning, art classes, and drama club. On the other hand, MSC shows pictures of cheerleaders, the monster bash party coming up, the pool at the dorms, and the new building on campus. OUC is more about learning while MSC is about having fun.

logos

We chose this picture to represnt logos. This ad shows that this bed is so comfortable, that you will sleep like a baby.

negative point of view

A chilling breeze moves the dead leaves on the trees as I sit outside the Bennet Hall. People are doing many different things such as killing their lungs & insides with their five minute cigarrette, frantically getting into their long waiting cars, quickly walking to class, boringly sitting on the steps at the Stevenson Center, and jogging because it's another form of excersie. The blinding sunshine is reflecting off of the cars in the parking lot and cars pulling in with their music blaring. Looking at every suspicious person, the security gaurd walks towards the empty amplitheater waiting to catch someone breaking the rules. You can barely hear people talking over the  extremely loud air conditioning unit. If you look at the ground, you can see the ants fighting over food but if you look up you'll see the broken, useless spider webs hanging off trees. The houses seem unwelcoming with their fenced in trampolines and swingsets in their backyards. Cautionary objects are in place but not used; stop sign on the road and fire extinguisher by the tree. One last thing you will never miss, our untaken care of American flag on the pole.

positive point of view

A light breeze moves the color-turning leaves on the trees as I sit outside the Bennet Hall. People are doing many different things such as enjoying their five minute cigarrette, getting into their patiently waiting cars, smoothly walking to class, relaxing on the steps at the Stevenson Center, and jogging to feel the cool breeze. The warm sunshine is reflecting off of the cars in the parking lot and cars pulling in with their music flowing through the air. Minding his own business, the security gaurd walks towards the empty amplitheater with a small smile on his face. You can hear the faintest of chatter over the air conditioning unit. If you look at the ground, you can see the ants excitingly move around but if you look up you'll see the carefree spider webs drifting in the wind. The houses seem so cozy with their trampolines and swingsets in their backyards. Cautionary objects are in place; stop sign on the road and fire extinguisher by the tree. One last thing you will never miss, our American flag, blowing in the breeze.

E: pg 54 w/o partner

Each ad is economically friendly. The saab car is "air-crafted" by jets and for ford suv is a hybrid.
The ad I choose is the ford with kermit the frog. I chose this ad mainly because I adore frogs. To make this ad better, I would show a recyling sign around the ford symbol. This ad is very good as is. I love how Kermit is saying "I guess it is easy being green". In fine print towards the bottom of the ad, it shows that this vehice get 36 mpg. In my personal opinion, that is great for an suv. The recycling signs would most deffinitley catch the audiences attention. Most people are into "going-green" and using less prroducts and recycling more often. If they saw an ad with a recycling sign on it, they are more likly to actually see what the ad is about.

Into/Thesis

The political struggles in Washington between the political partie are majorly effectin gthe economy.

The cartoons we chose are about the power struggles going on in Washington and throughout the US between the political parties. The power struggles are putting the economy under a great strain.

political cartoon 2

The key issue is that more people are loosing more things.
Everyone that has lost something is trying to get it back, but cant.
Current day United States. It first appeared in a newspaper. It is conservative, liberla, radical, and feminist. It shows the audience how much the world is loosing.
Joe Heller has been an editorial cartoonist at the Green Bay Press gazette since 1985. He only does political cartoons, nothing else.
The cartoons message is that more people are loosing mroe things. No irony.
This is a single frame cartoon.
Words and images are both used. It shows how many different things people are loosing. The words have more priority. This shows what all people are loosing now days.
The drawing is not realistic, but it is based on current day Americans.
This cartoon is more serious than comical. It shows whats happening to the world today.
A scene of people at the "lost and found" complaining about what they lost and trying to find it again. They are all from differant ages, genders, and ethnicities. No, they are just fictional characters in this cartoon. Its showing how everyone is loosing everything and the political parties only answer "theres no tax hikes".
It referes to whats happening to current day Americans. The symbolism is symbolizing everyday Americans which speaks to a broad audience.

political cartoon 1

The cartoon is addressing the fact that Obama is trying to make both the republicans and the democrats happy.
In the cartoon hes listening to both the "angel" and the "devil" to meet in the middle.
The fight between the political parties is the historical moment happening in this cartoon. The text first appeared in the news and is more liberal than conservative. It shows the audience that Obamas tryin to play peace keeper and is torn on which way to go.
The artist is an older man who normally produces cartoons about politics. He retired in 2007 from Colorado Springs gazette where he edited cartoons. He doesn't do any other writings.
The cartoons message about the issue is that he is trying to meet in the middle. There isn't any irony.
This is a series of sequential frames. He started by listening to the"devils" side and then switched to the "angels" side and finally met them both in the middle by saying "trying to find the middle ground grandma!"
Word and images are both used. The relationship between the two shows that hes trying to rationalize whether its stealing or sharing. The words have more oriority because it dispays why he is torn. This influences the cartoons overall persuasiveness because it appears that hes saying that Obama is trying to make both sides happy.
The choices of imagery and content the artist makes are kind of like a flashback to Obamas childhood. The drawings are not realistic and do not rely on caricatures. He includes allusions to the past by having Obama talk to his grandma in the cartoon.
The cartoon is primarily comic. It makes the issue more funny than serious.
Its about a person. He is a young boy. It represents Obama. He is nonfictional. It maked it look like hes had these decisions to make all his life.
The cartoon refers to Obama and he political party fight happening now. The symbolism in this cartoon is Obama making a decision on which side to please. It speaks to a broad audience.

9/20/11

Oh my, oh my. These poems are extremely different than the ones we have read in the first two weeks of class. First of all, the other poems were about feelings (mainly love and hate) but these poems seem to have hidden meanings to them. In Bob Hicoks poems, he doesnt flat out say what hes writing about, he wants to make you wonder what is going through HIS mind. In Hicoks poem "Fieldwork", he starts out comparing humans to beetles. Then he adventures off into talking about his friend that is returning from the Amazon. He basically explains what she did there and who she is, but then he ends his poem by saying "but how many get to touch and name and adore a fraction and flutter of life not even the jealous eyes of God have seen?". Therefore, in my personal opinion, I think this poem tells you to enjoy life while you can and take everything you can from it. Secondly, these poems are very unique. They're not your typical "roses are red, violets are blue." These groups of poems can be read like a paragraph, but understood like instructions in a forgien language. In Hicoks other poem "Sorting the Entanglements" it seems as if he is actually writing out his will, but there is hidden meaning to it that I still cannot see. I have thought that maybe after he says "In my will the basement goes to the spiders." he is actually writing the poem in a spiders point of view. Again, this poem still gets to me. Lastly, I believe these poems are based on life learned lessons and events. Dean Youngs poem "Selected Recent and New Errors" mentions all of his mess-ups and mistakes. He says "My errors are even bigger than that" reffering to the dictionary being confused of who it is. Then in Jennifer Knoxs poem "Chicken Bucket" it talks about a thirteen year old girl gettting high and having sex with three different guys in ONE DAY. But all she's worried about is the chicken bucket being okay. She's not the least bit worried about STD's of being pregnant, just the chicken bucket.
The poem I choose is "Selected Recent and New Errors" by Dean Young. All of his ongoing comparisons to mistakes and errors make this seem so real, especially when he says "You think that's a fucked-up, drawn-out metaphor, try this:" and then he mentions tequila and a dictionary. Towards the end of this poem, I feel as if he knows he made a bigger mistake in life and that he feels unknown. Young says "On mornings when I hope you forget my name, I walk through the high wet weeds that don't have names either." To me, this means he hopes the one person that ever realized that he existed now would just forget his name and let him be invisable again. The characteristics that best describe Young are messsed up, invisable, and suicidal. He thinks his mistakes and errors are bigger and more worse than anyone or anything elses. He wants to, again, be nameless like the high wet weeds. Also, he mention "life held together by the twisted silver baling wire", as if he has imagined hanging himself.

Chilton's Essay

The main idea of Chilton's essay is that the cartoon makes it look like the majority of illegal drugs such as cocaine, marijuana, and tobacco mainly come from outer third world countries like Mexico. The cartoonist  makes it seem as if only mexicans are being "killed" by the drug cartels when in reality, the entire world is. The thesis of this essay is that no matter what the circumstances are, the United States will basically always have a "wary outlook towards Mexico." Do I agree with Chilton's arguments? Well, in all honesty, no. I do agrre with how she sees the cartoon, but not how she sees drug life today. Drugs come from many many places other than "mexico". People today, right here in Chillicothe, Ohio grow their own weed in their backyards, woods, green houses, etc. It's everywhere. Someone else may see this cartoon as if drugs are killing mexicans. Chilton introduces this essay in a very formal way. She tries to grab your attention with putting an image in your head of how the United States looks at mexico. She even shows a cartoon to help you visualize what she is writing about. Each paragraph goes into more depth of what exactly shes talking about. She even uses history and her own interpretation of the cartoon to make her statement stronger. Chilton's seems very credible in the way that she uses her vocabulary. She makes sure to end with a very powerful line; "The cartoonist, and the world, must look elsewhere in an effort to truly begin to solve this international problem."

cartoon

hate hotel

"that's how hate works-it thrills you with it's deep heat."
I adore this line of the poem. It ties in with the litteral meaning. The litteral meaning of this poem is pure hate about everything, but hate starts from one tiny itty bitty tobject, and then explodes into one huge massive black hole.
"again and again I let hate get pregnant and give birth to hate which gets pregnant and gives birth again"
This line flat out says that hate grows. In the subtext, this person needs to go somewhere else to get their feelings out, thats why they go to a hotel. If they get their feelings out in their own home, other people may get involved, causing more hate. This applies to my life in many ways. When I'm angry, i normally drive somewhere really quiet so I can hear myself scream. My scream almost scares me, so I stop and realize how dumb it was to be mad to begin with.

Goldsteins essay

I think cartoons are safer. You can get your opinion out into the public world that way. Can they go over the line? I say no because everyone has a different "line". I do not think you can ever go over the line if you are open to everyone elses opinions, beliefs, views, etc. In my opinion, cartoons should never be censored. It is a form of art. You can express your feelings that way. Personally, I believe that if you think something needs censored, then you should not be looking at it all. When you censor something, it's just the same as changing someone elses work without their consent. Therefore, censoring is like plagarism.

9/8/11 homework

Alena DePugh

Hate Poem

The literal meaning of this poem is that Sheehan hates everything possible. It seems as if instead of being pessimistic, she is truly just jealous of everything around her. Personally when I read this poem, I pictured someone lying in their hospital bed hearing horrific news from their doctor or nurse.  After they heard the news, they just hated everything possible for no reason at all because they felt useless. This applies to my life because I have been in hospitals many times and it seems as if every time I go, I get worse news. Instead of looking on the downside, I try to be optimistic and make jokes out of it.

first post

I know what I'm doing. (: